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Post by Rumasai on Apr 18, 2007 10:40:24 GMT -5
Okay, before I start, I just want to say I hope this doesn't turn out really bad. This is my first try at one of these. By the way, can anyone who reads this let me know what they think? Thanks. Okay, here goes.
Introduction:
On the planet Velcrosia, -The Planet of Darkness- there lies an evil entity so great that any warrior that has come to attempt to slay it has never been heard from again. This evil figure has the power to destroy the entire galaxy it lives within. But somewhere in the galaxy, on the planet Chromalia, -The Planet of Good Times- there is a warrior who thinks he can do the job.
His name is Sevik. He makes his living as a mercenary. He stands at about 6'0, has dark brown eyes, and has dirty blonde hair. He was born with superhuman strength, and both his parents went to go and try destroying the evil being on Velcrosia, never being heard from again. He swore vengeance, and his adventure begins now.
Chapter 1: The Planet of Good Times: Chromalia
Sevik rose to his feet and stretched out a bit. He looked at the pendant he wore around his neck. "I'll get him; vengeance will be mine." he said as he looked at the pendant his parents gave him as a kid. He wore long black pants, a white shirt, and a black cloak that went down to his pants pockets. He wore a bag that had supplies for the journey to come. He'd been waiting for this. He was a well equipped man -a sword slung to his back, a dagger on either side of him, and two handguns, one in each pocket on the inside of his black cloak. "Today is the day I go." he said as he walked to the shop to see if it had gotten a ship capable of breaking through the atmosphere and sailing through space. He gets to the shop and he talks with the keeper. "You have a ship I can fly around space?" Sevik asked. "Yeah, came in about a week ago." said the keeper. "How much is it going for?" "That'll be 10,000 credits to you sir." "I have 7,500 here. How's that?" "The hell?! You think I'm crazy enough to give that to you for 7,500?! You're insane!!!" Sevik puts a dagger to his throat. "7,500 credits. I keep the ship, you keep your life." "A threat won't help you. I said 10,000!!" "Really, hows this then?" he puts a handgun to the keepers forehead. "You won't do it." the keeper said with a nervous look and he started sweating. "Oh really?" Sevik said. He points the gun up and to the right, fires a round, and puts it back to the keeper's forehead. He then puts his dagger away, and draws his sword instead. "OKAY! Okay! The ship is yours for 7,500, just don't kill me!!!" the keeper said, his face now drenched in sweat. "Okay, that's what I thought." Sevik said to the keeper. He places his money bag on the counter, throws his bag into the ship, and takes off.
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Post by Hades. on Apr 18, 2007 17:10:10 GMT -5
IS AWESOME! Keep up the great work! Haha... I want to hear more...
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Post by Kitten Kat on Apr 18, 2007 17:10:40 GMT -5
hahaha nice!!! i like the sound of this Sevik character. *waits for next chapter*
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Post by Hades. on Apr 18, 2007 17:41:17 GMT -5
*Sits in front of you like it's story time* More... you're very good at it.
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Post by Rumasai on Apr 18, 2007 19:09:16 GMT -5
Okay, I'll try.
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Post by Rumasai on Apr 19, 2007 16:31:25 GMT -5
Chapter 2: The Trip to Marculsia -The Advanced Planet- Sevik broke through Chromalia’s atmosphere, taking his first step toward Velcrosia. ‘I’m finally on my way’ he thought to himself. He decided he needed some extra supplies before heading to Velcrosia, so he started heading for Marculsia, a place where he could find whatever he needed. Along the way, his ship ran low on fuel. “SHIT!!!” Sevik screamed. He punched a wall in his ship out of anger, creating a hole to the outside. “Fuck, that made everything better didn’t it? You just had to go and punch your ship huh? So now not only are you on low fuel, but you won’t be breathing much longer either. Great job Sevik.” He said calmly. He let his ship float through space for a bit. He looked at the hole he punched. It was getting bigger as more time went by. ‘5 minutes’ he thought. “I refuse to die here, I haven’t gotten anywhere yet!!” he yelled as he took control of the ship again. “I’m going to the first planet I see, I don’t care what’s in it!!” he continued yelling, now anxious to survive. There was no sight of any planets, 2 minutes had passed. The hole in the wall was now about half Sevik’s size, but twice as wide. ‘Dammit, I might not make it’ he thought to himself. 3 minutes were passed, and the planet Takanna suddenly came into view. “THERE!” he shouted. He put his ship into top speed and rushed for Takanna. ‘Damn, don’t wanna crash into it, good thing the ships not that fast.’ he thought. 4 minutes had passed, and he was almost in Takanna’s atmosphere. “C’mon, C’MON!!!” he shouted. 5 minutes had passed, and he had broken into the atmosphere. ‘Now, to stop… I’m in trouble.’ He slowed the ship down as fast as he could, being able to see specific details of the planet before he was slow enough to land. He landed his ship, an entire side was almost ripped off. He passed out.
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Post by Rumasai on Apr 19, 2007 16:37:13 GMT -5
Chapter 3: Takanna -The Planet of Superior Beasts- Two hours after landing, Sevik woke up in his ship, which was in the middle of a desert. ‘Where the hell?’ he thought. He was lying on his stomach, and he looked to his left, where there was a huge hole in the ship. He pushed himself up to his feet. “Well, looks like I have a couple of things to find here… Hmm, a ship repairer and some fuel.” He said looking into the vast desert. “Well, here goes.” Sevik ran through the cruel desert to the first city he saw. He felt weak. He hadn’t eaten since noon the previous day, and it was getting close to 4:00 P.M. He walked around for a bit looking for any form of life when a chimera attacked him from behind, knocking him face first in the dirt. He gets up and faces the strange creature. He spits to his left. “I’ve taken down a shit load of beasts, but you’re by far the ugliest thing I’ve ever seen.” He said to the beast. The chimera had three heads; one in the front, two in the back. The one in front resembled a lion, the back left one resembled a serpent, and the back right one resembled a goat. It also had four legs that looked like a lions. “Not only are you hideous, but you’re also very stupid. You’re the first that’s ever been first to attack.” Sevik said to the beast. The chimera snarled at him ‘Why the hell am I talking to this thing? It can’t understand me. Shit… Forgot my supplies.’ He thought as he felt for his supply bag. “Okay, BRING IT ON DAMN BEAST!!!” he shouted as he drew his sword. ‘Looks like I’ll have to kill this thing in three steps. What order do I kill the heads?’ he thought. The chimera charged him and he got rammed into a wall. “Shit.” He grunted and he coughed up some blood. The chimera jumped at him this time. “No you don’t!” he exclaimed. He took a dagger out with his free hand and the lion head suddenly had a blade stuck in its neck. Sevik pulled the dagger and the head turned to stone. ‘One down, two to go.’ He thought. The serpent hissed wildly at him, and Sevik coughed up some more blood. He put the dagger away and swung the sword at the serpent head. His sword was deflected by the serpent, and it tried biting him. He dodged the snake head’s attack, and sliced the chimera’s front two legs. The chimera cried in pain. He then put his sword away and took out his handguns. His stomach growled, he needed food. He unloaded some rounds into the goat head, but was careful not to use too much. When the head looked weak, he put the gun in his left hand away, took his dagger out again and pierced the goat head’s throat. The chimera was releasing a tremendous amount of blood now. He took the dagger out, and the goat head now turned to stone. ‘6 rounds, three in each gun, and only a serpent head to go.’ Sevik looked at the head, confident that this would be no problem. He put the dagger away, and put a gun in his left hand again. He alternated the hands fired with. He shot 5 bullets, and walked up to the head. “You’re fucked.” He said to the serpents head. He pulled the trigger for his last bullet, but nothing came out of the chamber. He thought about his previous actions and started to scream. “FUCK!!! WHY THE HELL DID I WASTE THAT DAMN BULLET BACK IN CHROMALIA!?!?!? WHY DIDN’T I RELOAD ON THE SHIP!!!” he exclaimed as he threw his guns to the dirt. “HOW THE HELL AM I SUPPOSED TO BEAT THIS THING NOW?!?!” he shouted. The chimera attacked, and Sevik’s upper right arm was bitten. The serpent kept its head there for a bit. Sevik reacted by grabbing it just below its mouth with his left hand, stepping on its neck right near its body, and yanking. The serpent’s head eventually ripped off. Sevik saw an oasis and ran there quickly. He first drank some water, then he cleaned himself of blood and washed his arm where he was bitten. “Much better.” He said. ‘Still need food.’ He thought to himself. People almost instantly appeared in the city. He got back to looking around the city, and someone found him and took him to their house. “I’m not gonna mess with you, especially after seeing that. Here, take this with you.” He goes to hand Sevik two bottles filled with water, and a bag filled food, and 2,000 credits. "I don't want your money. What I want is a repair guy for my ship and some fuel for it." he said shoving everything but the food back in the villager's face. "Okay, I'll send some people out immediately. We owe you, we have out village back" the villager said.
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Post by Kitten Kat on Apr 19, 2007 16:37:58 GMT -5
*sits next to lilly* OH NOES!! man no cliffhangers!!!
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Post by Rumasai on Apr 19, 2007 16:38:53 GMT -5
Wait, I put a third chapter there.
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Post by Kitten Kat on Apr 19, 2007 16:43:43 GMT -5
^_^ yay!!! even better!!! Sevik kicks ass~!!!
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Post by Rumasai on Apr 19, 2007 16:46:00 GMT -5
Cool. that's what I was going for. How's the story thus far?
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Post by Kitten Kat on Apr 19, 2007 16:46:53 GMT -5
^_^ awesome!! sevik's a bad ass ^^ and it sounds like he has a lot more fights for him
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Post by Hades. on Apr 19, 2007 17:35:16 GMT -5
HECK YEAH TOTALLY!! *Waits for more* aww man! You should write more and... Sevik is freaking amazing!!!
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Post by Rumasai on Apr 20, 2007 9:57:22 GMT -5
Yay, I made a cool character. Oh yeah, sorry about the major lack of details, I accidentally took that approach, but it seems a bit too late to change it. I guess think of it as a way to view the story the way you imagine it would be. Sorry again. I might redo the whole thing when I'm done, but massively more detailed for those of you who'd want to see that. Just wondering, who'd be interested in that?
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Post by Rumasai on Apr 20, 2007 15:26:42 GMT -5
You'll hate me, but I have an extension for chapter 3 that I'm gonna add when I get the computer.
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